Correction texte en anglais

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Bonjour tout le monde,

voila j'ai un oral à passer en anglais demain et j'aimerai bien savoir si il y a des fautes dans mon texte..
Je n'arrive pas tellement à étoffer tout çà sachant qu'il faut que je tienne environ dix minutes, auriez-vous des idées ??

Merci pour tout et passez un bon dimanche !!


THE GLOBAL WARMING

This document is a photograph, wich we found a magazine, which is called « le monde des ados ». This photo talks about global warming and so disappearance of polar bear. This is a real problem today …

Global Warmings effect has serious consequences for all living organisms, but it is of especially great concern for the polar bear.

On this picture, we can see one polar bear which is on a floating and melting.
This bear is surrounded with some ice floe. The scne takes place in the ARTIC ocean, in the north pole, where polar bears live and other animals which also live in polour places. On this photograph, there are not a lot of colors, juste blue and white. Blue because there is the ocean and white because there are icebergs since in the north pole, temperatures are very cold in spite of global warming. On this photo we can clearly distinguish two grounds.
First, in the foreground, we can see a big and beautiful white polar bear, it is abviously the focal point.
And secondly, in the background, we can see icebergs. The polar bear is looking at the photographer, so looking in our direction, so looking at us.

Polar Bears as the Symbol of the tragedy of Global Warming !
The polar bear is in danger because global warming is causing the ice caps to melt and the polar bears live on the sea ice so if their's no ice the polar bears will be homeless and because people hunt them down for their winter coats since their soft and thick. hope this helps. And also if they dont have any ice to stand on they will drown beacause they will have to live in the water. And the seals and whales and other sea animals have a better advantage of get it. So then the polar bear will become enxtinct
The most recent scientific report says that all arctic ice could have disappeared completely by the summer of 2070.
By photographing this animal, the photographer wants to pass a message to us .. and what is the message ? It is: « Let us save our planet »

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in this video, we can cleary see polar bears are in danger. Polar bears have need ice field to live.
They can't swim all time, they aren't fish. They need to rest on the ice field and also to eat. This video is very alarming.