texte sur le monde du travail à corriger svp

[klooo]

Bonjour,

Je dois écrire quelques lignes sur le monde du travail en anglais. C'est un texte que j'ai choisi simple et j'aimerais vous le soumettre afin que vous m'apportiez conseils ou corrections.
Merci par avance.

Since the industrial revolution, the world of the work has changed. The high concentration of companies in the suburbs has prompted people to leave campaign/country (?) (rural exodus) . Indeed, the new production modes/methods (?), as assembly lines, have made employement of many unskilled people possible.
Nowadays, being available and clever with his hands is no longer enough to find a job.
Besides (furthermore), the economic crisis has caused an increase of the unemployment, making access to employment harder and harder. Now, it is necessary to be overskilled, flexible and versatile.

[bryanb]

Since the industrial revolution, the world of work has changed. The high concentration of companies in the suburbs has prompted people to leave cthe countryside (rural exodus) . Indeed, new production processes like assembly lines, have made the employement of many unskilled people possible.
Nowadays, being available and clever with his hands is no longer enough to find a job.
Besides (furthermore), the economic crisis has caused an increase in unemployment, making access to employment harder and harder. Now, it is necessary to be overskilled, flexible and versatile.


// J'ai apporté quelques corrections mineures au texte mais j'avoue ne pas trop en comprendre le sens: D'un coté vous mentionnez: "new production processes like assembly lines, have made the employement of many unskilled people possible" et après "the economic crisis has caused an increase in unemployment, making access to employment harder and harder. Now, it is necessary to be overskilled, flexible and versatile." , ce qui se contredit d'après moi. Enfin, je vous souhaite bonne chance…
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